Chapter: Run Page: 7.7


Chapter: Run Page: 7.7

September 29, 2020
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September 29, 2020 Hmm, Gary is deeply worried. I'd bet something was stolen. Probably not just cigarettes.
September 29, 2020 gotta say i agree with RockB. probably Gary lost part of his southern rock CD collection. or did his girlfriend take that when she left? it's hard to remember when you're both the town gun salesman and the town drunk. well, one of the many town drunks. ok, they are all town drunks. i mean, they're probably statistically not ALL town drunks -- but i assume that's the excuse they use when they tell their friends they saw little aliens running around inside their houses.

"girl, i ... uh ... just drank so much last night, you know? i saw two of those little grey aliens in my bedroom."

"tell me about it -- i was so drunk they were climbing all in my trees."

"at least yours were outside!"

"nah girl, they used their alien powers to bring the damn trees inside. they totally switched the inside and the outside of my house, you know. i was sitting there watching tv, and then all of a sudden the street and the telephone poles and everything were where the living room used to be, and the corner shop was where the kitchen used to be. i literally had to go outside just to find where they had moved the toilet."

"oh, girl -- i hate when that happens."
September 29, 2020 I'll let you tackle the writing from here on out!
October 6, 2020 my characters, characterizations, character arcs -- they are all so tight, yo.

girl-one and girl-two.

literally lounging off the screen.
September 29, 2020 That store looks so legitimate. I mean those hunting rifles... I doubt if Deputy has to show any ID for anything (and maybe cigarettes are free?)
September 29, 2020 Why show ID if your information's already on file? Same as a doctor's office or the quickie lanes at airports ... in his case, the security lanes, flash a badge and you're through, even if you're not security, just cleaning crew.
October 6, 2020 He doesn't seem the observing type.

What are 44's? Half an Otto?
October 6, 2020 Cal. 44 (or 0.44? I have no clue) ammunition, I bet.

But while we are at asking questions: What are "reds"? My guess was that they are cigarettes, maybe Lucky Strike Marlboro (because he ran out of 'em a page ago) because of the red logo. Correct?
October 6, 2020 you're right on both guesses!
October 8, 2020 Very interesting. I'd never assumed you'd just buy ammunition over the counter like that.
Although I guess his badge makes a background check less necessary than another customer.
October 8, 2020 Arizona gun laws are very laxed (transfer of ownership doesn't need to be recorded, but there is a BG check for purchasing from a store). But you can buy ammo without much trouble most everywhere.

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